cardiovascular news report topic and designing a hook for your news report.?

cardiovascular news report topic and designing a hook for your news report.? this is what i did, but my teacher took points off, some help please?

Cardiovascular diseases [CVDs], too young to die?
Today, Tomorrow, Who will be Next!
By 2030, almost 23.6 million people will die from CVDs, mainly from heart disease and stroke.
11/13/2009
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DIRECTIONS:

determining your cardiovascular news report topic and designing a hook for your news report.

When we watch television, there are often commercials or media clips provided by the network that are designed to get us interested in upcoming shows or stories. These attention-grabbing methods are referred to as the hook of the story and are designed to grab a viewer's attention. A hook will often incorporate an introductory statement, shocking statistics, or “sneak peak� of the broadcast.

1. Choose the cardiovascular topic for which you will complete your news report. You might consider focusing your news report on the importance of the cardiovascular system and fitness, choosing cardiovascular activity at different life stages, the importance of monitoring your heart rate, or cardiovascular diseases and prevention. If you have difficulty deciding on a topic for your broadcast, be sure to talk with your instructor for ideas.
2. View sample hooks.
3. Create a hook that you will use to introduce your news report that will engage and hook your audience. In your hook you may wish to include a shocking statistic, a quote from a celebrity or trusted public person, an outrageous comment, a related event, an interesting fact, or an unanswered question. Keep your hook short. You want to tease viewers with just enough information to keep them watching.

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